[New-Poetry] Draft of a Schoolwide Blog Entry

[Bob Grumman]

Anny Ballardini wrote:
> I would avoid the use of 'dumb.'

Dopey?
>
> I particularly enjoyed your twist here:
> it can symbolize Loss, Failure--but maybe something else, maybe 
> elation at letting go of the balloon and watching it climb the sky!
>
> the reading here is lovely, and the exclamation mark that follows 
> 'balloon' marks as a matter of fact a wonderful detachment. The 
> formatting got lost,
Actually, it came out close to right.

> but we can see that 'balloon' stands out there, up high, on its own. 
> The same word: balloon, with its double light 'L's and its double 'o's 
> conveys a certain lightness and joyfulness.
> Further down, weighing down, the admonishment: 'Hold on to your"
>
> /Yessir, I will, too late though, because it already escaped, :-)
> brilliant red/or blue/or yellow dot in the sky.
> /
Thanks, Anny.  But do you think the idea of the layers as I describe 
them works?

--Bob
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