[New-Poetry] Excellence?

[Rsgwynn1 at cs.com]

I recently received this as an entry in a contest I'm judging. I thought it 
the best of the lot (given the generally low quality). It kind of reminded me 
of Craig Raine, with some genuinely um-Martian turns or phrase.  Any thoughts?

Obviously, I Said

For example, the wheelbarrow behind 
the avocado pit indicates that the flatulent 
cloud formation gives secret financial 

aid to an industrial complex. If a dreamlike
maelstrom usually gives a pink slip 
to the overpriced bowling ball, then 
 
some pig pen beyond a power drill it
resembles.  Some mating ritual 
hibernates, or a shabby 

tornado recognizes a cocker spaniel. 
Most people believe that a dolphin 
around a microscope gives secret 

financial aid to the barely bohemian 
maelstrom, but they need to remember 
how lazily the mastadon meditates.

For example, a fire hydrant 
defined by a tornado indicates that the tabloid 
of the turkey almost avoids contact with a polygon.


 
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