[New-Poetry] Lifshin

Robin Hamilton robin.hamilton2 at btinternet.com
Fri Nov 2 22:26:45 EST 2007


Richard:

<<
She doesn't write for you,
she looks in the mirror

And writes to the person
she sees in there.
>>

Why not cut it back to just these last four lines (perhaps with a title)? --  
That's a poem in itself.

(And perhaps drop the "in" in the final line -- "she sees there.")

Robin 



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