[New-Poetry] Re: error

[Bob Grumman]

>I tried hanging that on a wall but it lists to the left.  I suggest
> moving the top nail hole (o) left a few notches.
>
> - Werk Jeans
>
> On 5/7/07, sprosch vac 2 <sd at debris.org.uk> wrote:
>>
>> !authenticity i cried rising from autofmt (iso-8859-1)", as one would.
>>
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>>      dEbRiS                               <><
>>    e sd at debris.org.uk         .                      ><[[[[º>
>>  web http://www.debris.org.uk
>>      scattered_fragMents.l0ose_materiALs.etc       o
>>                 . / . .       |||    .   /      .*-|/-*      delete?
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>>                                                                exit
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>>      volvo water water water water water indigo november

I'm horrified by it.  It's so much better than any of my poems.  I love the, 
"as one would."  But it could be improved.  For example, I'd make the last 
line, "volvo water water father water water father water water indigo 
November."  (I'm actually serious.)

--Bob