[New-Poetry] Poems by others: Laura (Riding) Jackson, "The Troubles of a Book"

[James Cervantes]

On 6/9/06, David Bircumshaw <david.bircumshaw at ntlworld.com> wrote:
> Don't quite agree, James. Looking again at the poem, Very Carefully, we have
> the repetition of 'letters' in the space of 4 lines, 'breath' and 'breathe'
> on the same line and the god-awful rhyme of  'liveliness' and 'bookishness'.
>
> Could do better, as they say on school-reports. (Her pararhyme of 'with' and
> 'breathe' is quite snazzy though)

It was the thought that counted for me. As fer poetics, I agree with you 100%.


-- Jim

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