[New-Poetry] Poetic dialogue?

[Anny Ballardini]

Time baritone winds deep in the forests
Deep forests wind the baritone of time
Baritone forests time the deep winds
Forests deep in time baritone winds
Time winds baritone deep in the forests
Forests of winds baritone time deeply
Deep winds forest time baritones 
  ----- Original Message ----- 
  From: Halvard Johnson 
  To: NewPoetry: Contemporary Poetry News &Views 
  Sent: Friday, December 29, 2006 5:49 AM
  Subject: Re: [New-Poetry] Poetic dialogue?


  Or how about


  "In the baritone forests, time has deeply had it."


  or


  "In deep time, the windy baritones have been forested."


  or . . .


  Hal


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  On Dec 28, 2006, at 10:50 PM, Rebuketheworld at aol.com wrote:


    In a message dated 12/28/2006 6:03:43 P.M. Pacific Standard Time, duemer at gmail.com writes:
      But there is a difference between creativity & illiteracy. 
    I changed the sentence but I knew what I was doing. I don't think the sentence is as interesting grammatically correct but because my mold is a baby, I can agree to think differently. At first, I was fine with the change but every time I read it, the sound and meaning seems less.  What that will mean to me later on years will change and I am open to anything. 

    I naturally go by sound, rhythm and meaning prior to grammar. I wonder how many would prefer the incorrect sentence? Maybe my style will challenge the grammatical standard. I just hear it differently. ~Raven

    grammatically incorrect

    Into the deep forests, the baritone winds has had its time.

    vs.
    grammatically correct

    In the deep forests, the baritone winds had their time.

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