[New-Poetry] Poetic dialogue?

[James Cervantes]

On 12/28/06, Linda Sue Grimes <suelin7184 at gmail.com> wrote:
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> Dear Raven,
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> Please explain the purpose for your misuse of language in the following
> line:
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> Into the deep forests, the baritone winds has had its time.
>
> Thanks,
> Linda Sue

Not bad if cleaned up:

In the deep forests, the baritone wind has had its time.
Leaves shuffle before snow weighs them down.

Of course that is derivative.

-- Jim
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